求助check一下下面这句话的语法是否有问题？
The comparison between the predicted results by SVM model and the calculated results obtained by numerical experiments demonstrates that a good agreement has been achieved. The research shows that the integrated model with SVM and GA proposed in this paper can predict longitudinal and transverse inherent shrinkage in a convenient and accurate way for the T-joint fillet welding within a certain range of welding parameters.
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The comparison between the predicted result by SVM model and the calculated result obtained by the numerical computation demonstrates that a good agreement has been achieved. The research shows that the integrated model with SVM and GA proposed in this paper can predict both longitudinal and transverse inherent shrinkage in a convenient and accurate way for the T-joint fillet welding within a certain range of welding parameters.
描述好罗嗦啊，为什么不直接说模拟与实验结果一致。二者一致那肯定是比较产物，不需要额外说明。
如果沿用当前句式，原句明显有点头重脚轻，不如直接改成the comparison showes a good agreement between the predicted results ... and the calculated results... .
此外，results by描述有些问题，个人感觉用某种手段研究问题时用by，而结果通常可以描述为来自于/出自。。。，是不是应该用from呢。出自计算和实验的结果，results from simulation/experiments是不是好一点。或者直接写成SVM results，experimental results。
后句2种手段如果是各自适用一个方向的话就加个seperately，如果是通用的，可以考虑加个both。
我也不知道，开始用的from，后来改成了by，楼上那位大神用的是by，我感觉他的也没错。这些个专业语句是很麻烦，一长串才能表达一点意思。
by是你自己的词，他没改。你一个有obtained一个没有他也没改。
语句太罗嗦了，读起来是很累的。罗嗦与专业是两码事。
主语搞了一堆修饰语别人读着读着都忘记主语是谁了，所以尽量不要把修饰语放在前边，最好分离出来。
英语中对比的时候貌似喜欢用compared with A，B... ， comparison between A and B不常见，因为真的太长了。
results与from连用较多。常见的引用别人图片时不就用的from么。
result by真没见过
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